Chapter 2 Third Person Rewrite


Art appreciation, it is such an easy class after a night of very little sleep.  Avi was still full of energy.  Hannah always complained that she didn’t have the energy that Avi had after a paltry three hours of sleep. Struggling to concentrate, Avi sat staring at Ryan the yummy black haired surfer sat three rows ahead front and center. It didn’t take long for Avi to lose the battle against her imagination. She couldn’t help but to get lost in his behind.

Searching his emerald eyes for permission Avi reached to grab his black hair. She loved the silky feel of his locks. She saw the agreement in his eyes and quickly went on her toes leaning in as he tilted his head forward. The kiss set Avi on fire and she delved further into the kiss. Avi looked into those green eyes and kissed his chin then licked down his neck. She gave a love bite with a moan. Grabbing his t-shirt, he removed it. Avi then got a view of all of his tribal ink. She couldn’t help herself. She used her tongue to trace the ink. He grabbed her hair roughly to bring her back to his mouth. A scorching kiss ensued.  Avi sighed into him mouth,” Ryan.”

 Avi brought her hands to his chest and pushed him back onto the bed. Quickly she straddled him. He rose up taking her shirt off as he came.  He discovered a black lace bra with abundant cleavage.  He reached behind her to release the clasp; releasing an ample supply of breast to enjoy. As soon as her breast were freed, his mouth and hands covered them.  Avi let out a moan of appreciation.  Her nipples were hard and ached. She felt her pussy gush.  Wanting him more with each breathe.  She reached to him waist band and started to undo…

 “Avi,” Hannah called. “Where did you go? Class is over.  Did you sleep through it?”

Avi shook her head. Gave a nod to Ryan, “Sometimes I have the best daydreams.  You interrupted just as it was getting really good. I hope to find out one day if he is as good in bed as I think.”

“Didn’t you get into enough trouble last night? Plus, Ryan has a girlfriend.” Hannah pointed out to Avi.  She had always been the one to keep me in check.

Avi laughed, “Oh Hans. We are all adults and she is more than welcome to join us. She is HOT and I would gladly have her on her own.” Hannah shot Avi a glare making certain Avi was fully aware of her displeasure. Avi as always wasn’t deterred. “So, did you hear about the party over at Jill’s? I want to go.  Let’s go tonight.  It is sure to be fun.  You know you want to go.”

“How are you still on your feet?  I don’t think you have slept for days.” Hannah was right, Avi hadn’t slept for days. It wasn’t the first time and likely wouldn’t be the last. She had energy enough for days. “You really need to take a night in to recoup.  You need to take care of yourself plus it is a Thursday Avi.”

“Thursday is just pre-Friday.” Avi declared as she rolled her eyes. “You just happen to be no fun. I know you hate being my babysitter.  You stay home.  I need to get this energy out.  I am definitely going out.”

The look Hannah was giving let Avi know she had won.  Avi had an intense for Hannah. Clearly, she needed to make sure she knew just how much. If Avi knew anything is that she couldn’t lose Hannah. She needed Hannah.

Getting ready to head out the girls turned up the radio and giddily danced around the bathroom.  The room was filled with laughter and chatter. Avi couldn’t remember the last time it was just the two of them having a little fun. Leave it to Hannah to press pause on the fun. “Rules for the night, Avi. One, we go together, and we leave together. Two, if you can’t follow rule one, make sure I know just where you are headed and with who. I love you, Avi.  No ditching me again.” Avi was sure that they were both aware that she wouldn’t be following rule one or rule two.  She was forever disappointing Hannah.  Avi really needed to do better with Hannah.

Demi Lovato’s Sorry Not Sorry was blaring as we walk in the door. Three blonde princesses were on the counter dancing while the boys below worshiped at their feet.  The royal family was holding court. Avi laughed as the boys showed no shame in making sure they got a good view.  There was jockeying for better position. The party was raucous. With a quick look around Avi could see that the living room was past capacity and there was barely any room in the kitchen. As Avi made her way through the crowd, she knew just where she was heading. She was going to add some brown to the trio of blonds. She had worn mini floral purple number sans the panties.  A few drunk guys helped her up on the counter while copping a feel.  Boys they never did surprise you. For Avi that just meant she knew which boys were eager to get her naked.  Avi liked knowing the quickest way to a next fix. Avi’s body was vibrating with need. Sex was the only thing on her mind.  The question really was the form in which the sex was going to happen. Once Avi was atop the counter with the three blonds, she looked out into the crowd at the red locks curling around the Hannah’s face.  We caught eyes and she mouthed,” I’m not joining you.” Then she pointed to the living room. Avi was always amused when she recognized that she hadn’t even had a drink.

Avi was sandwiched between to two blonds. The taller blond was her height.  The 5’8” tall Caribbean blue-eyed siren nestled he toned body to her back and the tiny pixie with the hair to matched and stood just over 5’ looked up to me with her emerald eyes.  In true Avi fashion, she couldn’t stop a sexual action when it came to mind. She reached down to the pixie then swooped in for a passionate kiss. The commoners below began cheering for more.  So Avi pulled the pixie closer, reached behind her and had the lady long legs and pixie swept into a kiss before they even realized it. She ran her hands down the ladies and cupped their asses in tandem.  Oh this night is going to be good.  Avi one if not both ladies will be with you and soon. Avi then kissed long legs and pixie put her hand up my dress.  No panties is my jam just for this reason. So easy to move things along.

The raucous crowd grew louder. Energy at these parties overwhelmed her senses and fueled her desires. The leggy vixen and the cute pixie and Avi danced for a few songs. She wasn’t sure you could call it dancing when it was more like dry humping.  Yeah, so done with this. Time to move from dry to actual humping. Avi grabbed the hand of her pixie and made her way off the table.  She looked up at the long-legged blond to find her shaking her head.  That was fine with Avi because she could always find another willing body. Avi felt alive as the music pulsed its way through her body. She wasn’t forgetting that surprise in the emerald eyed beauties eyes when she kissed her.  This little one was a treat she couldn’t wait to have.  She needed something more tonight.  She needed a penis.  Really any penis would do. Yep that hunky football player will do.  He towered over me at over six feet.  Avi loved seeing the small and large together. She grabbed his hand. He looked confused until Avi pointed at him and then between the blond and herself. Once he caught understanding, he guided them to a room Avi knew too well.  Yes, a fun night for all Avi thought.

The blued eyed tight end wasn’t sure what to do when we reached a quiet room towards the back of the house.  Avi looked at him and whispered, “If you want it take it.” His hotness didn’t waste a moment and took me in for a kiss while I guide my pixies hand to his cock. Avi loved the moments when the debauchery began.  She felt such euphoria. There wasn’t a feeling that she could find that compared.   Avi grabbed Mr. Big and Beautiful by the cock with one hand and took to the pixie’s mouth again. The kiss was hard and needy. Avi needed this kiss like she needed air.  Blue eyes nibbled at my neck and the pixie and I had him disrobed in no time.  Avi liked to be in charge.  She in short order had herself positioned at the head of the bed, the pixie on her knees and the hunk taking her from behind. She loved watching the large man take this little woman who was devouring her. Soon they had all come were exhausted in a pile. Quickly, Avi had recovered then kissed them both goodbye. Avi looked over her shoulder one last time as she walked out to see Mr. Blue Eyes and Pixie in what she would term one hot ass kiss. This wouldn’t be the first time she had formed a new and lasting couple.  Avi didn’t do relationships though, who needed those when you could have sex with as many people who are willing and even better if there were more than one willing at any given time.  No one needed to get tied up in love and feelings and shit. Oh my GOD, Avi thought, that just made me want more.


Jeremiah had come to this fancy shindig to look for one person and one person only, Avi! That woman left him wanting more.  While it had been fun to share, he wanted her and just her. He wasn’t sure why there was the draw to this woman. Everyone knew Aviana was never going to be caught.  Really, he knew it as well, but he couldn’t help but want to capture his butterfly. He knew that the only way to get her in his bed was to share with her with Alex. Now that he had her, he was going find a way to keep her.  As he searched the crowd, he found Evan. Evan was sitting with Avi’s best friend Hannah.  Evan had texted him earlier to know that they would be here tonight. Jeremiah’s stalker behavior was paying off tonight. Jeremiah made his way to the pair. Hmm, the pair looked cute.  Lucky Evan had been drawn to the safe friend. Jeremiah, he knew he had always been pulled to the bad girls.

 Ah, speaking of bad girls, Jeremiah sensed her entering the room. He looked up to her scanning the room. He saw a smile on Avi’s face as their eyes met. Alright, she remembers me too. Jeremiah’s awareness of Avi’s tendency to only have one night with any partners had him a bit cautious.  The smile on her face gave him hope. What was it with this girl? He knew she was hard to handle. Her deep tanned skin, curly long dark hair and those pensive inky eyes pulled at him. Avi was heading straight for him.  Excitement pulsed off his skin.

The distance between them finally breached, she up looked at him, “Jeremiah, right?” His throat tightened. He wasn’t sure if he could speak. He nodded. Avi grabbed his hand. His heartbeat accelerated. He knew taking her hand meant a trip down the rabbit’s hole, but he was holding on for dear life. Everything in him in him wanted her.

Avi stopped in front of Hannah. She spoke with her a little dropped her keys in her hand and laughed as she pulled me along. “Where Is your car? We are headed to my place.” Jeremiah pulled her to the car right down the block.  He opened the door for her. Helped her onto her seat. Then finally finding his voice, “Where are we headed, Avi?”





Chapter 1 Third Person Rewrite



Aviana hadn’t even opened her eyes as she languidly started to stretch.  She thought it odd this weight pinning her to the bed.  She lifted one eyelid and then squinted at the vulgar sunshine. Her eyes adjusting to the intrusion, she finally opens her eyes.  Peering back at her was possibly the most stunning set of blue eyes the world had ever known. Deep sapphire blue was at the center and they faded to the soft sky blue on the edges. His face was framed by a strong jaw that was stunning. His sun-bleached hair made him look innocent.  Avi wandered, how was this god-like man allowed to walk with us mere mortals?

The bed adjusted on Avi’s other side. NO no, no, no. Wait. Not again. What are their names? Oh, Avi you don’t know their names, again? Yes again.  Nope not take that guilt trip. A deep baritone warmed her body. “Hey there you sexy thing.” She crooked her neck to look at the man behind her.  There had to be a sexy man attached to that voice.  If he wasn’t that voice may just be wasted.  Please, please, please be another god. When she met a pair of hazel eyes with golden flecks. She slowly perused this new body. Avi was happy with what she saw, black adjacent curly hair flopped into those hazel eyes. He was muscled and tan. He looked like he could be a Greek god.

Avi as about to speak when that velvety sound filled the again. “I am Jeremiah and that sexy beast is Alex.  We didn’t exchange names last night.” She looked at Jeremiah and thought, things could have been worse.  Here she was lying in bed with two of the sexiest god-like creatures on earth. “Hey, my name is Aviana.  Just call me Avi.” Maybe last night wasn’t all bad. No Avi this is always bad. Who does this? She looks between the two men taking up the remainder of the bed. She was certain this might be the best way to start the day.

“So, it was great to meet you, it has been fun.” Last night was flooding into her memory. Well this is awkward. This can’t keep happening. What is the protocol for this? Do I do the walk of shame twice? As she began to move, she felt an arm reach out. She was looking into those hazel eyes and a smooth grin that had his dimples in view. She couldn’t help but smile. Avi’s heart did a little stutter.  Jeremiah framed her face and brought her in for a forceful kiss. He consumed her.  She felt the lips of Alex on the back of her neck. Her head fell back on a moan.  Jeremiah came back in for a kiss.  It was deep, steamy and full of longing.  The question was clear, Are we doing this again? Well Avi, In for a penny in for a pound. She reached for Jeremiah’s neck and down the rabbit hole.




Hannah was waiting at the window again. She was separated from Avi at some point last night. Hannah was worried as she paced in front of the window. She worried about her best friend.  Avi had been with her since they were eight. Avi brought joy and chaos into a room. People either hated or loved my favorite person. Hannah thought about all the times she waited for Avi. It was so hard to love her. Worrying was part of loving her.  People have come and gone from her life, it is hard to stay. Hannah looked down at her phone and realized it was time to reach out and make sure Avi was okay.


Hannah-Where are you? I am getting really worried. It is past 9 and class starts at 10.  I searched the house and you are no where to be found. 


Common Avi. You need to be home.  Hannah continues to pace. Is it possible to worry a hole into hardwood.


Hannah-Avi, I am not humored.  Where are you?  Do I need to contact your dad?  You have 10 mins.


Her worry continued to grow.  One of these days, she is going to get into trouble that we can’t help with.


Avi-On my way Hans. I just had a fantastic time. It was two for the price of one.  I enjoyed the play.  Be home in 10 mins.


Hannah knew that Avi was going to fall once she got home. She always did. It was so easy and so hard to love Avi.  Hannah was sure she had never known a friend to love as fiercely as Avi. Her love was intense, hard to handle and impossible for Hannah to walk away from no matter the amount of crazy that seemed to come with it.




The smell in Aviana’s car was one that you could just call shame.  It was a mix of Jeremiah, Alex, Avi, sex and a slurry of bodily fluids. The feeling was so good until Avi was alone.  She now knew it for what it was another way she was disappointing her friends and family.  Her parents were so happy to have Hannah at the same school.  She knew that they believed that Hannah would help keep her in check. Avi had turned wild at the age of 15. Hannah kept by her side.  She was so good to her.  Avi was certain that Hans was regretting going to the same college.  Hans was always babysitting Avi. She had to stay up late nights and sleep was rare for Avi’s best friend. Avi knew that she was luckier than most in the friend department. Avi hoped that all her antics wouldn’t chase Hans away.  It would kill her.


Avi screeched to a halt, jumped out of the car and streaked into the house. “Hey, Hans, I am here.  Taking a showing and will be out shortly.”


Avi hear a solid, “Yeah, Yeah.” She loved Hannah.


Avi stepped into her shower. Warm water ran down her head and down her long dark hair. She loved the feel of hands rough in her hair. Avi looked back on the night. Her body was sore.  The shame came and went. Right now as her scalp still felt the tingle from this morning, she was overwhelmed by the shame. Avi knew she was a disappointment when the voices in her head got any amount of silence. She shifted her back to the still cold tile. Leaning her head back unable to hold back the tears. She had the shame inducing offending clothes right out of the open shower door. As the water continued to flow she prayed that the shame would finally wash away.  How many times will you let this happen, Avi?  She picked up her head knowing that classes would be starting.  She turned off the water and stepped onto the floor.  Grabbing a pair of jeans and a t-shirt with a quick ponytail in her hair and she was ready to go. Stepping back into her room, she saw Hannah on her bed books on her lap.




Hannah looked up as Avi stepped into the room. “So, do you want to talk about it?” Hannah softly queried.


“You don’t want to be late to class, Hans.” Avi was clearly annoyed Hannah knew that she was fussy because of last night.  Hannah hated seeing her this way.  There were times she felt like Avi’s enabler. Hannah knew Avi was no drug addict at times she did wonder if Avi was a sex addict.


“We have to talk about this, Avi. You know that you are destroying yourself.  I see the tear stains. The shower doesn’t cover that. I love you. I want to help.  Nothing you do will make me leave.  We have been Havi since grade school.” Hannah lifted her pinky finger and Avi accepted.


“Havi for life girl. I am not ready to talk it out yet. It is always so amazing in when it happens. It is new and amazing.  I try new things. I only want more. Then I am alone, and my surroundings are empty, and my head gets full.  Let’s get going. We have art appreciation in less than an hour.”



Chapter 3.5

Jeremiah shivers. I pullback and take in the picture. His penis is a beautiful thing. His thick shaft is a special treat. It is time to fully indulge myself. I greedily take in the tip again then slowly make my way down. Once I have him in my mouth as fully as I can take him in this car, I ya my hand to grip his base. I stroke him at the same pace. Slowly at first. The tempo get more ravenous with each passing. The hand and mouth working in tandem with pleasuring Jeremiah the sole goal. I wrap my tongue around his cock and increase the pressure. I quicken the pace and feel the pulsing that happens right before a man comes. Screaming my name, pulling off the road to regroup, Jeremiah pants and struggles to regain his control.